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    ok guys last year when s60 was still up i wrote a story i had to follow some guidelines since it was for a homework/project in english im gonna post it and u guys tell me wat u think alot of u might not remember these allainces and yes some of it is blown out of porportion so disregard that.

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    The city of New York once a population center of the world well that was when the world hadn't gone to hell. When the global economy fell for the 4th time this time it was huge it backed everything up even our technology, Russia went into panic and exploded a huge EMP across the world shutting off most electronics for over 300 years now. Since then the whole world went to chaos and whoever was strongest could survive, there was no president anymore or democracy its different way different. But after awhile people began to combine structures were torn down and destroyed, so thus the world decided to go back to the medieval era replacing metal structures with wooden towers, and lords and kings for towns. The world went out of balance deserts popping up out of nowhere and in 100 years the lands all joined together. Instead of naming it Pangaea like before we split the names up New York was a part of the area known as Romanga. As kings rose so did want for power and alliances formed with fights across the land of war and destruction. People used codenames instead of real names but those codenames became their real names so soon enough those real names didn't exist. Everything changed so much since then," Paingod's son ended his little rant with a sigh.

    That it was. ******fag one of his friends added as they looked over the hill at the vast city of New York. Man times were pretty tuff not that long ago as well.? Paingods'son added in My city, my main city was continuously being hit by Petoria members until I was finally able to get away. And now your cities are vast with people and strong itself. ******fag said. ******fag was the leader of our alliance known as DARK we were known as the 23rd ranked alliance in the entire world. ******fag was about mid 30s he had brown hair as well as Paingod's son. Paingod's son was around mid to high 20s with the brown hair as ******fag but just darker. Our alliance has grown strong. Paingod's son said. Yes but I worry sometimes if we will be stomped sooner than later. ******fag told him Well there are smoke signals to talk with those that join us always and only our alliance can see these types because of the special type of water we've put in the eyes. The other thing is if they ever quit the alliance that water disappears from their eyes which is good because otherwise they could tell what we are saying. Yeah thank god for that. Paingod's son said well back on subject, ******fag started we need to talk about something important as soon as Iam and Jah get here. At that moment they had heard rustling behind them as the clop of hooves behind us as we saw 2 men being escorted on horseback by horseback riders surrounding them. They reached them one was around his low 30's with black hair but a brown beard, his hair was scraggy and unkempt. He had the reigns of his horse in one hand and his helmet in the other, the man next to him was about mid 30's he was clean shaven and had blonde hair that was neatly combed. ******fag looked at the man with brown hair, Jahrastafari how are you today?? I'm good. he said with a smile on his face. DF (******fag) looked at the man with blonde hair Iamtheman how are you today? I'm good as well. Iam told us. Ok DF started before we catch up with each other let's start off with business. Kokoman has left our allied alliance LOVE after he was done battling the alliance TROY they aren't defeated they are still in the top 10 but with LOVE's help he was able to put them in their place. But Templars, Petoria, inferno and Bigheads have started to attack the weaker alliances one by one and TROY is starting to basically hate us. I am fearful that we will be on the verge of war here soon. Well DF? Paingod's son said I've been hearing around that Petoria and inferno are going to try and take over by themselves. Yes I've been hearing that myself as well Pain but we can?t rely on rumors. DF told him, but we need to be prepared for the worse Petoria and inferno already hate us we don?t need the other top alliances breathing down our necks. What do u suppose we should do? Jah (jahrastafari) asked.
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    Oh dear gawsh how many question marks did you use? I mean they are like everywhere? Argggh, now youve got me doing it ?

    Shouldnt this be in like rp and stories?

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    Lawl this looks liek copypasta

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    “Well” DF started “We could either take the risks of joining them or we could join the resistance other plans are needed though if any of you three have suggestions speak up.” Iam (Iamtheman) spoke up “well we could always try to take them on we may be ranked 23rd but last time inferno underestimated us they found themselves having to pick up their dead alliance members people off the ground and their city.” “True” DF said thinking about it “pain” DF said “what do you think we should do?” Pain smiled “well DF what we should do is send a spy and start rumors of war and destruction throughout Templars and Petoria about TROY and inferno. If we can turn the top 5 against each other they will destroy themselves and then we will see if the winner decides to fight the lower ranks again.” “If there is a winner” Iam said “yeah” jah said “they may just destroy themselves and who knows they may bring others with them.” “what?” pain said puzzled “well when their cities are being attacked and they are attacking they will need more food they will need more resources and the easiest will be the lesser powered cities around them bringing war the barbarian cities will only give them so much in an attack.”

    “Well although that could happen I think it might be a smart idea because it’s about the only thing we have that could solve this once and for all.” DF told them. “Well then let’s do it after we catch up” Iam said as he dismounted his horse lying under the shade of a tree. They all dismounted and sat in a circle as they caught up on events and talked more about war and resources and strategies but what they didn’t seem to see was the small assassination group in the bushes watching them from far away.
    “Well when are we going to get our chance?” the first assassin said. “Patience we must wait they are still talking and signaling troops to do things for them.” The 2nd assassin said “LOOK!” the 3rd assassin chirped “Pain has sent a soldier back down the hill he must be getting ready to leave”. They moved to a better position to watch what happened next as they saw a group of 12000 archers moving up the hill and report to Pain as he talked they started to nod. The archers turned and within a second they had their bows out and ready with an arrow on it and the string pulled back full tension it was obvious they were well trained and knew what they were doing. They pivoted to the direction of the assassins. “what are they doing?” the first assassin asked “I don’t kno”- the second assassin was cut off as Pain yelled “FIRE!” and the archers shot the arrows and the assassins stood up realizing they were being fired upon trying to get away, one had tried to jump down the cliff into the gulley but he made one step before the first arrow hit its mark in his chest knocking him down as the blood started to ooze from his chest but the pain wasn’t long as more arrows started to hit as he died the others met about the same death as 12000 arrows pounded either into the ground or into them.“Good job” Pain said while eating his green apple, “now have of you light your arrows on fire and fire them over there again make sure there is no survivors.” Pain said again “YES SIR!” they yelled in unison and like a well trained machine without even talking to see who would get to do it half of them dropped and dipped an arrow in oil and put it in the campfire. They pivoted and shot with expert accuracy. As the area started to catch flames pain waved with his hand telling the archers they were done. “Hahahaha.” Iam laughed, “its funny how they think we don’t realize where they can hide whether it be over there or up in the trees” Iam said. He shot up spinning and grabbing one of his Pikeman’s pike and in one swift motion brought the back end into the trees and bringing it down but with a strange figure in a cloak with it. As he brought up the pike the man tried to move but was met with tons of pikes and swords right in front of him as his eyes grew huge he saw Iam in front of him the pike in his hand smiling at him. “Good day sir, how are you today?” Iam asked
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    it is lol i wrote it a long time ago my leaders name wasnt allowed in forums lol <--- not part of story GAHHH stupid question marks i didnt mean to have them fail
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    the man stayed quiet “well a spy eh?” DF said “why are you here and who are you working for?” the man answered, “I am no spy I’m a hero sent with the spies to help get more info unfortunately they all died over there with that assassination group, never in my days of becoming a hero have I seen such an inexperienced group of assassins and spies. “yeah” Pain said “they were easy to spot huh wouldn’t have happened with my spies that’s for sure in fact they are one of the reasons we saw them all.” “See over there in those trees” Pain pointed to a big group of trees lower down on the road paved hill. “Watch” Pain said “SCOUTS! SHOW YOURSELVES!” At that moment 10 people had dropped out of the, what looked like a regular tree and headed their way. “you know you could work with us” Iam said “why should I do that?” the hero had asked “well because we have 2 choices one we let you go and let you tell whoever you are working for our plans or two we kill you now.” “But here is the mystery door my friend”. DF said with a voice that resembled a game show host. “the mystery door behind it shows the ability to help us with our plan, we will send you back and we will send some of our spies and scouts with you to wherever your king is whoever he is and tell him that we were discussing those lords of our alliance who will be expelled soon and if we should. Then you tell them that on the back you were hearing talk about them from another friendly alliance of yours and you tell them that they wanted to attack them from out of nowhere and take them out.” “First of all though” Jah started “who is your alliance?” “My alliance, my lord belongs to Petoria the 2nd best alliance in this world.” Pain’s face went from content to furious as his brown eyebrows started to fold inward and his face became disgruntled he showed his teeth as out of anger his left upper lip started to quiver. The hero started to back up until his back hit the tree as he saw pain. The look on the hero’s face had turned from serious trained straight face to the very seldom fear for the look in pains eyes at the mention of Petoria had felt like a dagger in his soul. “PETORIA!!” Pain yelled “I HATE PETORIA THE STARTING DAYS OF MY KINGDOM SAW NOTHING BUT ATTACKS FROM YOU PETORIAN SOLDIERS!!” Pain tried to move forward “Restraint!” DF yelled as 5 swordsmen grabbed Pains’ arms and putting their hands on his chest trying to push him back. “PAIN! CALM DOWN!” DF yelled at him Pain settled down and went back into an upright position as the hero sighed a breath of relief. “So” DF started again “what's your choice?” “I choose to work with your men but without the assassins and other scouts they are bound to know something is up.” “That’s why you’ll be under my order from now on” Pain said the look of fear went back on his face. “don’t be frightened yet my spies will be dressed and be as your assassins and you spies and go with you if you drop any info remember my men can grab you and be out of their before you have time to react.” “But you better watch your step in my kingdom if you think you will have any freedom at night or even in the evening you have another thing coming you will have scouts watching you 24/7 even if you are using the bathroom there will never be someone not watching you.” “Ok” the hero said “but calls me Tyler that’s my real name”. “ok well you will be coming with me for a little bit we will get this done and over with pretty soon Petoria will be feeling betrayed by TROY and the rest of them and start to try and hit them.” Pain said
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    “then it will cause havoc in the top 5 as they will start to break up from all the rumors and reports their so called spies bring them.” “might work” Tyler said unless they decide to protect each other by making one huge alliance.” “What!” DF said “they will do that?” “Well the plans are still sketchy but it’s still in progress and they could if they wanted to”. Tyler replied they made their way down the hill to their battle horses as they all mounted on it Pain’s spies cam dressed just like the Petorian troops. “Ok now then GO and be swift about it time is going to tell how this will end.” Pain said. “I don’t know how this will turn out as well but this will be on huge game of chess” pain finished with. He took off with the rest of them as Jah Iam DF and Pain all went in one path and then farther down disbursed Iam and Pain going in one and DF and jah going in the other their troops following them as Tyler looked on he saw their cavalry coming up from out of the woods behind them he counted just merely Pain’s cavalry and counted over 45 thousand cavalry troops following him. Wow this might be a good idea after all Tyler thought to himself.





    “We need to batten down the hatches dark I’m being attacked by troy they will reach me in 45 minutes they bring 6 waves of 50thousand archers with ballistas by the amount of 3k each wave with 10k warriors each wave I don’t know if I can survive this time.” (Slvrdemon). Slvrdmons emergency smoke signals flared in the sky as Pain looked over and saw it his face frowned as he realized what it said. “Damn why would they be attacking slvrdemon?” Pain said. Through smoke signals. “I’m not sure why but they have a messenger that just got to me.” DF replied “It says that if we don’t give up that the attacks won’t stop and we will fall.” “DAMN IT!” Pain replied in the smoke signal, “those stupid TROY are attacking for what for dominance why can’t we just all be peaceful and just try to drive these barbarians out of the land.” “Doesn’t matter pain” jah said through the smoke “I might have an idea Templars leader Sassy owes me I’m going to message her asking her to help and hit their cities.” “You do that jah we will start sending troops to back him up.” DF said over the smoke signals. “Guys I have some bad news” Iam said from smoke. “Troy all of their alliances all 5 of them has gathered in one area so they are basically”- “one unbeatable city” Jah interrupted with his emergency smoke. “Sassy just sent a messenger back saying what they did and that troy was planning to take us all out, but luckily Sassy also told me that they only want to kill our men armies and us our cities are of no use to them.” “Then we must all go to one city to protect each other with our troops.” Iam smoked them “go to mine.” Pain said “I am an amazing defender and we will see if they have what it takes.”



    They headed out all their men behind them towards one of Paingod’s son’s city known as Linduana. They reached their later as Slvrdemon got a report from TROY messaging him telling him that he thought he could run but they found out where they are going and now troops will be starting to head there with heroes and them themselves. “This sucks we must be sitting ducks now” Don said “No we aren’t they are over to the north so we know where they will be coming from let us prepare but to survive your workers must do exactly as I say.” “There is one other thing Pain” Slvrdemon added. “The city New York is where they based their cities.” “This means they are coming from the west” DF said “that’s even better” Pain said with a smile that means they will be coming from the west meaning they can’t do any type of sneak attacks or have any chance of high ground from above us.” He said looking up seeing the cliff above the castle where they had partially carved it in. “Alright let’s get started!” pain yelled “ok we need more archer towers above on the cliff and we will need more logs and rock falls over on the east wall.” “Then we need to get the top of the hill hanging above us we need to quickly pick it out so they can’t hit it and have it fall on us.” “YES SIR!” the soldiers yelled all around them as they grabbed shovels picks and mallets while horses came with wood in the carriages. They worked in the sun for hours directing and maneuvering the sun was beginning to go down and they could tell that they didn’t have much time before TROY got there or the sun went down, they knew they needed to work fast and so they did each one of them sweating profusely as they worked hard. They finished finally everything set up. The scouts then got back with reports of the enemies army. “Well my dear boy spit it out!” “How long until they get here and how many of them!” Pain urged the scout looked at him in the eyes with a straight face “ we have most of tomorrow before they get here they will get here just before sundown and as for their army there is over 6 billion of their soldiers heading our way against what 2 billion of us, we can’t win my lord I am sorry.” Pain lowered his head and shook in disgust he raised his head and his hand smacking the scout across the room. “I’ve trained you way better then that!” Pain yelled at the scout; don’t underestimate the power of DARK.” The scout got up “I’m sorry sir it’s just that the statistics show we have no chance.” “Statistics also showed that the world was going to end in 2012 but it didn’t, I’ll be DAMNED! If they take us out without losing almost everything and everyone they have!” Pain yelled.
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    lawl your grammar is almost as bad as mine

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    The next day a meeting was called with all the soldiers and members, Pain had gone over what they are to do what their strategy was and how to keep TROY at bay for as long as possible. He could tell they were well trained as they got almost everything completely down to the works even the things that take trainees months to learn how to do; they learned most of it within 6 hours. The light had started to go behind the trees time was running out. “OK EVERYONE!” Pain shouted “TO YOUR POSITIONS! Pain waved his hand to sound the trumpet as people ran from place to place grabbing things and putting them in other spots. Pain walked up to the top of the first wall and looked out across the darkening land where it was almost musky. “SIR!” a soldier in a trench below Pain looked down “A GROUP OF 1 BILLION HEADING OUR WAY!” the soldier yelled “What?” Pain said “they are sending numbers almost even to ours in 2 waves are they suicidal.” They heard a trumpet but it was no trumpet of TROY as pain looked out and saw the group of Templars and the alliance ranked 5th known as our law came up the others we did not know who some of them were but as they approached he saw there was more than 1 billion it was more like 1.5 billion people with a white flag. They came to the walls as they opened the gate. “What's your reason for being here all of you!” Pain yelled a commander spoke up for them. “We are all members of some alliances from here in Evony Troy has become too strong even for Templars we must ban together to fight them.” “Very well” Pain said. “Read those instructions and do the best you can to organize soon this will be one hell of a battle.” He pointed to a wall where a paper was that showed some of the plans. And strategy as some looked at it with confusion Pain yelled “FOR THOSE OF YOU WHO CAN’T OR HAVE NO IDEA WHAT YOU ARE TO DO ACCORDING TO THOSE INSTRUCTIONS FOLLOW THOSE STEPS TO THE 2ND WALL AND FIRE ARROWS WHEN I SAY FIRE AND FOR YOU GROUND TROOPS PROTECT THEM!” the group of troops ran around some who knew how to do some things went to the positions and others went to the top and then all was quiet and the light was fading as time passed the day seemed to end earlier but that was our minds not the actual time the waiting was knowing away at some people someone down below in the trenches started to freak out yelling “THE SUN GOES DOWN AND THE LIGHT IS FADING IT’S A SIGN OF CERTAIN DOOM WE ARE ALL LOST!!!” “Keep it together soldier!” Iam yelled to him. It was getting darker as the sun started to go into its sun set it was still musky as we lit the torches all around. Then they heard it, the sound of millions of war horses and footmen and weapons dragging or being clanked across the ground. Pain looked up and squinted and saw the first of the men as a man tall with blonde hair galloped onto a boulder that was sticking out of the ground he was dressed in armor and his horse was white with its own armor as well. The troops stopped 5 lines of the troops were in front as more and more people galloped or walked onto a boulder with 10 swords men and 20 archers guarded each of them.
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    The first man who was on the front boulder with blonde hair yelled in the silence “TROY is offering you to give up and there will be no casualties and we will continue on our way if not well I’m pretty sure you know what will happen”. He chuckled at the last part and Pain did not look amused. “You TROY scum ill never give up to the likes of you, you don’t scare me or my members there is no chance I would give up to you not in a million years not if we were outnumbered 100billion to 50”! He yelled “bold statement and great speech”. The troy character said to him. “But me the leader of this attack will show you true fear as you watch your men die one by one, how many do u think we have anyway”? “6 billion I’ve been told.” Pain replied. “Well that is dead wrong my friend”. The TROY leader told him there was rustling among DARKS soldiers as if a chill had been sent up all their backs. “We have 20 billion strong right now so then we will see what will happen are you going to give up or you will be completely annihilated.” He threatened. Pain looked at him with a straight face and said a word that brought a little worry not a lot but enough to the TROY leader, “Let them come”. Pain said raising his hand and with that there was a roar from DARK showing they were prepared to die there. “Very well then”. The leader said “May your god bless you!” he yelled “CHARGE!!!!!!!” He threw his hand out yelling



    The TROY troops charged horses galloped men ran and the first lines thoughts made them smile as they looked and saw that no one was firing upon them. “Half way their” they all thought in their heads looking up smiling. Pain’s hand up all 5 fingers together and up as you would do if u were vowing in court. “hold, hold” he said he saw them halfway there and their smiling faces shown on them, as the other lines following them were right behind them he chuckled and his face then went serious. “UNLEASH HELL!!!!!!!!!” he yelled throwing his arm down at that moment millions of arrows came out flying through the air the soldiers saw it and realized he had been waiting for enough of them to be able to hit so they did not waste much ammunition. But that wasn’t why Pain knew he had plenty of ammunition to last 5 months of a siege they had to be prepared always, Pain thought to himself “the more we can take in one hit the more casualties they get and that means anyone left will be picked off one by one. He looked down as he saw 500 cavalry forces had made it with almost no hits on any of them from the barrage “hold!” he said “they will find out a little surprise”. He said smiling the cavalry were galloping their hearts beating as the adrenaline went through their veins they found themselves close very close to the walls then they saw it a trench half of them jumped over it but the others were met with sharpened pitchforks by the warriors and troops in their the pitchforks rammed into the horses. NEAHHHA the horses screamed in pain as the fell the men on those horses got out and pulled their sword ready to fight but another 700 arrows came flying down upon them before they could act they were filled with arrows all over them as blood sprayed out all over the cavalry that made it over looked in awe and that pain knew was their mistake as 500 pitchforks from above flew down to them and hit them all not one missing its point there was screams and cries of pain and then the 4 lines that were sent were gone and it was silent. Pain walked down to the battle zone with a group of troops as they stabbed the troops making sure they were dead Pain looked up at the TROY attack leader’s amazed face. Pain smiled and took a bite of his apple as he said “Now there’s no reason we can’t be civil about this”. He finished the sentence as his sword went into an injured mans chest killing him. “None at all, my lord said one of Pain’s troops stabbing his pike into another one. As they walked back the TROY leader’s face went from astonishment to anger. He growled as he yelled orders. “THEY WONT LEAVE THIS PLACE AT ALL MEN YOU KILL ALL YOU LEAVE NONE ALIVE! JUST ATTACK ATTACK ATTACK!! Pain looked at his men and told them simple orders, “men the attack has begun you know what to do.” He looked up at Jahrastafari and nodded. Jahrastafari looked and smiled at him with a nod. The darkness finally fell and the rain began to fall the torches however stay alit and hot. Pain looked at his men “Fire” he said calmly at the top of the steps. The arrows started to fly over and over again hitting people all over the TROY leader looked confident still but there was something in the back of his mind that was itching it could have been something of warning or of cowardice
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