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    Just a crappy poem I wrote during Calculus today. Post your thoughts so I stop feeling all emo and stuff.

    Alternate title:

    "Don't Let My Girlfriend Read This."


    Broken down, broken hearted
    She's his, but I'm always hers
    Should have finished what I started
    My love for her shall not disperse

    But it's over, I've no chance now
    She's in love and I'm alone
    I won't have to bring her down now
    She seems to have a heart of stone

    Got to stop this madness soon
    Unknown love eating me away
    Cry alone underneath the moon
    And hide my face during the day

    All my hope is dead and gone now
    They're in love, and I'm alone
    What's the point to be alive now
    Goodbye, world, and your heart of stone

    Yet in death I am more lonely
    None comfort my weeping soul
    Into the infinite, she is my only;
    Eternal love hath taken its toll.
    Last edited by trogdor1316; 01-14-2011 at 05:28 PM.

    So what will you do when they call your name and you're not ready to go?
    Everyone will stare at you and tell you what you know
    That you're in too deep and you can't quite keep your secrets, one and all
    We might just make it after all, on our own

    Quote Originally Posted by rasterbee View Post
    That's a cleverly stupid response, trogdor.

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    Um... yeah hi. As far as poems randomly written during class go, that's a pretty good one. I've seen worse. Much much worse.


    That kind old lady stopped the rain for us.
    She said it would only make us cold, and miserable, and sick.
    We thanked her and hugged her and she walked away smiling warmly.
    I miss the puddles...

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    awww melt my little heart!! so full of depth and feeling, so full of love and longing. you have put into words what so many wish they could, you have captured the moment of forlorn heart break that so many drown in trying to understand. with delicate understanding and unabashed abandon you cry out what all broken hearts cry out, with more love then pain, with more hope then despair, with more life then death, while dieing in despair and pain.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Bree Fletcher View Post
    Um... yeah hi. As far as poems randomly written during class go, that's a pretty good one. I've seen worse. Much much worse.
    Thanks, I guess. Lol.

    Quote Originally Posted by imnothere View Post
    awww melt my little heart!! so full of depth and feeling, so full of love and longing. you have put into words what so many wish they could, you have captured the moment of forlorn heart break that so many drown in trying to understand. with delicate understanding and unabashed abandon you cry out what all broken hearts cry out, with more love then pain, with more hope then despair, with more life then death, while dieing in despair and pain.

    Thanks, Gwen...you've got a knack at making me not feel like killing myself

    So what will you do when they call your name and you're not ready to go?
    Everyone will stare at you and tell you what you know
    That you're in too deep and you can't quite keep your secrets, one and all
    We might just make it after all, on our own

    Quote Originally Posted by rasterbee View Post
    That's a cleverly stupid response, trogdor.

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    i do my best, i'm working on writing more for that campaign we talked about. if your still interested

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    Well anyway, glad to see you again and I'm glad that what you post wasn't a waste of my time.


    That kind old lady stopped the rain for us.
    She said it would only make us cold, and miserable, and sick.
    We thanked her and hugged her and she walked away smiling warmly.
    I miss the puddles...

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    So what you're saying is...I usually post things that are a waste of time?

    You know, I would be insulted if not for the fact that I completely agree with you.

    So what will you do when they call your name and you're not ready to go?
    Everyone will stare at you and tell you what you know
    That you're in too deep and you can't quite keep your secrets, one and all
    We might just make it after all, on our own

    Quote Originally Posted by rasterbee View Post
    That's a cleverly stupid response, trogdor.

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    be insulted anyway its funny

    yes i just said your funny when you act insulted

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    Quote Originally Posted by trogdor1316 View Post
    So what you're saying is...I usually post things that are a waste of time?

    You know, I would be insulted if not for the fact that I completely agree with you.
    Or... I'm saying that many things that end up in this section in general are a waste of my time?


    That kind old lady stopped the rain for us.
    She said it would only make us cold, and miserable, and sick.
    We thanked her and hugged her and she walked away smiling warmly.
    I miss the puddles...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Bree Fletcher View Post
    Or... I'm saying that many things that end up in this section in general are a waste of my time?
    you wouldnt say that. no one bites the hand that feeds it. except alligators.

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