Did someone say bump?
I mean...oooo cookie.
Thanks Borune and as far as critique goes, I love the story but you repeat yourself a little bit at some points.
Like:
At the time there were no other immortal children so he grew up making friends with the many animals who inhabited the heavens and the over-world. He became so attached to these animals in his childhood that when he became older he continued his bonds with his sheep and cows and other animals.

with shortly after:
As the ages passed he became more and more attached to his animals as they became attached to him.

I suppose it was to get the point across? But to me I was sort of like, well...you've already told us this lol.

The labryinth is interesting...perhaps you could explain how clay pulls towards a door? Because in my minds eye I can't picture it.

Other than that I really enjoyed it and look forward to the next installment