No offense or anything, but I believe that language was invented as a means for communication. Therefore if we have trouble deciphering your use of language, it really did not achieve it's effect, and thus "failed" to be a good use of langauge. Just my opinion, and why I'm not into poetry.
I like stories that are short and concise, that are simple to understand, that tell what would normally be told in 10x the length.



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